After filming Will took the footage to create a very quick rough cut during the holiday.
This was the quick rough cut: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=K0yxUXq6BN0&feature=youtu.be
Will sent us all the link and asked for comments so i emailed him with list of comments which are as follows:
“General overall notes:
The inside stuff with lighting obviously is over orange this can be corrected using final cut pro. Go to effects-video effects- color corrector- 3 way color corrector then drag onto the clip you want to edit double click it to reveal in viewer go to the effects menu and you will see 3 color wheels the far left titles “whites” take the eye dropper tool and select a object that should be white to reset white balance. (this should do it when done can be copied onto other shots to save manually doing each scene.).
The audio totally needs re doing in my opinion this was a very good attempt but as we all know audio is always a git to do testing re attempts will have to do until we get them right.
The pace of this piece for the most part is good the transfare from room to room and outside locations seams natural without any major jumps except for the going into the toilet. But in certain parts it needs to be tightened up I belive to give it a professional polish.
Obviously I don’t know how the other shots went but some shots like the elevator I believe would be a benefit and add a bit more comedy to it.
I feel as if Will has edited it down to fit the 3 min mark when as this is only a rough cut edit it to fit naturally so if it lasts 10 mins that’s fin but then we can decide as a group what works and what doesn’t .
Notes I took whilst watching that refare to a time code:
Establishing shot has to go or be re-filmed
Dissolve at 13 secs doesn’t really work needs to either cut or separated b a cut away t the two just sitting there if we have one.
23 secs the pan needs to be a second or two later let the tension build up a little first.
27-29 secs need to hold a little with them looking at each other
36 secs should cut back to this shot when they are looking at each other then break the gaze not come straight back to him getting up already
44 secs if we have a shot of luke reading the paper then throwing it down would be nice to have that in before e throws it down giving a slight time passing by feel
1 min sound and shot is great really builds up well think it is in need of sound in background still some audio lacking the closed eye shot works great. What happened to the magazine? If we have a ok shot quick one of that would be nice with a few more cu aways keeping to the same pace of the watch shot. Currently seams a little slow pace needs re thinking.
1:19 when music cuts out it feels as if its only just come in too soon for it just to cut however like the idea just maybe bring music in a little sooner or push back when he gets to the loo.
1:28 this scene way too long either chop it up so it jumps and gives the impression of time passing or lose it maybe?? If we was to lose it replace with the elevator shots? (not sure how they turned out however.) other option voice over some better audio making it a bit more punchy
2:34 cut this shot a sec earlier just takes a little too long it only needs a very little move
2:55 “oh my baby” gets a little annoying maybe cut out the audio of one of those and use slightly more shots of buggy rolling to give a impression of the buggy rolling for slightly longer
2:58 audio needs some TLC transfers from 1 audio level to another very quickly also a cutaway of a toilet sign that he sees maybe? Before he throws her.
3:06 cut to him walking into the toilet and door closing doesn’t match up quite right just seams a little odd atm maybe try shifting them a little
3:12 toilet way to clean for the reaction of him looking in disgust
3:18 this is the big reveal and seams a little too quick maybe build it up a little more with facial expressions before seeing the magazine still leading them to believe he going to the loo before you reveal the mag and what he is actually doing the cut to the outside is very nice though
Credits need to be re-written don’t look professional and the terminology isn’t great however some of them where great like catering lol need to written as a group for an official list including thanks to the admin in the library and people who volunteered to be in it at the opening day.
Not sure what I think about the bit after not against or with it really just doesn’t add too much.”
a lot of comments but we deicded that we would all meet up to put our input in and do a further joint edit.